Thursday, March 28, 2013

Announcing the April 1st 5 Pages Workshop w/ Mentor Lauren Bjorkman


The April First Five Pages Workshop with guest mentor Lauren Bjorkman will open for entries at noon Eastern time on Saturday, March 6th. Check the full workshop rules at the link below:

http://firstfivepagesworkshop.blogspot.com/p/workshop-rules.html?m=0



About the Mentor:

Lauren Bjorkman is the author of Miss Fortune Cookie, Henry Holt, 2012, which was nominated by the American Library Association for Best Fiction for Young Adults in 2013. She also wrote the award-winning young adult novel My Invented Life, Henry Holt, 2009.

Lauren grew up on a sailboat, sharing the tiny forecastle with her sister and the sail bags.The voyage started in California and ended in Argentina. During that time, she kept up with school through a program called Calvert out of Maryland. Her dad read stories to her and her sister at night by the light of a kerosene lamp.She now lives in Taos, New Mexico with her husband and two sons.

Find her on her website, her blog, or on Twitter.
MISS FORTUNE COOKIE

by Lauren Bjorkman

Meet Erin. Smart student, great daughter, better friend. Secretly the mastermind behind the popular advice blog Miss Fortune Cookie. Totally unaware that her carefully constructed life is about to get crazy. It all begins when her ex-best friend sends a letter to her blog– and then acts on her advice.

Erin’s efforts to undo the mess will plunge her into adventure, minor felonies, and possibly her very first romance. What’s the likely fortune for someone no longer completely in control of her fate?

Hopefully nothing like: You will become a crispy noodle in the salad of life.


Read the first chapter HERE or learn more at Goodreads.

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MY INVENTED LIFE


by Lauren Bjorkman

With Roz and Eva everything becomes a contest–who can snag the best role in the school play, have the cutest boyfriend, pull off the craziest prank.Still, they’re as close as sisters can be. Until Eva deletes Roz from her life like so much junk e-mail for no reason that Roz understands.

Now Eva hangs out with the annoyingly petite cheerleaders, and Roz fantasizes about slipping bovine growth hormone into their Gatorade. Roz has a suspicion about Eva. In turn, Eva taunts Roz with a dare, which leads to an act of total insanity. Drama geeks clamor for attention, Shakespearean insults fly, and Roz steals the show.

Humorous and heartfelt —Booklist

Roz’s voice is witty and genuine —Publishers Weekly

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Monday, March 25, 2013

First Five Pages Workshop Success Story - Laura Tims


I’m so lucky to be able to say anything about my success story here, since I’m lucky to have a success story at all! A couple years ago, I finished my first book, and I felt so bad about it that I only sent out five queries, all of which were rejected. I had no idea how other writers produced the shiny, practically flawless manuscripts that got snapped up by agents. When I did figure it out, I was so surprised by how simple the answer was – feedback! I’d been too shy about my first book to really ask for much, but when I finished my second, I roped an amazing group of beta readers. I got tons of help with my query on AbsoluteWrite. And the First Five Pages Workshop, which is one of those things you can hardly believe exists because it’s so helpful (the first five pages are so important!) made me confident enough in my beginning to start querying with gusto.


My querying journey took about a month, and at the end, I had six offers of representation from six truly wonderful agents. This happened before I was really used to the idea that I could get even a partial request. I’m pretty sure my head fell off for a while. All I could think about was how incredibly LUCKY I was.


And then I realized—it wasn’t luck at all! It was the people who were willing to take their own time and energy and put it into my project. Without them, I’d be back on square one. So that’s the best advice I can give—find people you trust and admire to read and critique your book, put your material out there, and if you happen across something as awesome as the First Five Pages Workshop, jump on it!


The writing community is seriously full of people who want to help, who want you to succeed. If you’re feeling uncertain as a writer, the best thing you can do is connect with other writers, because they’re some of the most caring people I’ve ever met. (And the funniest, and the most outgoing…whoever decided writers had to be taciturn wallflowers has never been on Twitter.)


And, of course, have faith in yourself! Because if anyone else can do it, so can you. :)

Want to know more?

Laura's got a great post up here where she shares the query letter that got her representation as well as a lot more information.

http://www.lauratims.com/2013/01/i-just-got-my-contract-in-mail.html

And here's the link to her workshop entries:

http://firstfivepagesworkshop.blogspot.com/search?q=tims

First Five Pages Success Story - Brenda Drake



Brenda Drake's journey kickstarted right here on Adventures in YA Publishing and in one of our First Five Pages Workshops.



Brenda Drake writes young adult and middle grade novels. Look for her debut young adult novel, LIBRARY JUMPERS, coming February 2014 and its sequels February 2015 and February 2016 from Month9Books. Find her on her blog, Brenda Drake Writes, or on Twitter. She also has a new round of Pitch Madness coming up!Brenda Drake Writes. . .

I'm so excited to be sharing my success story here on Adventures in YA and Publishing. There was a time when I huddled, scared, in my writing cave. I was afraid of venturing out into the world of more seasoned writers. I started a blog. No one ever stopped by and commented on it. I started a Twitter account. I only had a few followers. Some were spam. But then I started participating in blog hops and stumbled across a workshop on the Adventures in YA and Children's Publishing blog. To my surprise, I made it into the workshop. Martina Boone and Lisa Gail Greene were so kind and helpful. My query was extremely long and did not focus on the plot. My 35-word pitch was confusing. With the critiques from their guest author, JA Souders, Martina, Lisa, and commenters, I was able to get my query into such wonderful shape.

When I queried with the shiny new query, the partial and full requests started rolling in. I went from no response to many. I soon got an agent and sold LIBRARY JUMPERS in a three book deal. I think this is where I fell in love with the 35-word logline. Why? Because it taught me to narrow in on the plot of my stories.

Before I got my agent, I entered my middle grade novel into the First Five Pages Workshop Martina and Lisa put on. The workshop helped me find the voice for my story. Workshops like that are invaluable. I received many helpful suggestions and encouraging comments.

I was so amazed at Martina and Lisa's dedication that I threw my own contest to give back. Before long Pitch Madness took off, and other contests followed. If you are new to the wonderful world of writing, the best gift you can give yourself is to put yourself out there. Don't be afraid to let others critique your work, enter contests, make friends with the participants, join Twitter, and make many writerly friends. Surround yourself with your peers and learn from each other. Going it alone, without any feedback, may keep you from taking flight and finding the perfect flock of like-minded friends.

Monday, March 18, 2013

March 1st 5 Pages Workshop Final Revisions Are Posted

So what do we think? Please read the entries posted below. Have they managed to eliminate the onramps to the story and get the reader into the action (as discussed today by author Paula Morris in our Inspired Openings post).

The writers have worked hard this month, and Tracy Deebs, our marvelous mentor, commented on the initial round despite having pneumonia and a recently published book to promote. (Haven't read DOOMED? Get on it!) We are beyond lucky in our mentors!

Speaking of which, did you all see the book cover for Lisa Gail Green's upcoming release, THE BINDING STONE? It is BEYOND gorgeous! And not only is Lisa a wonderful writer (and her upcoming book is wonderful!), but she is brilliant at getting to the heart of a craft problem, and she is a tireless supporter for writers.

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What do you think? Isn't that a beautiful cover? I read an early draft of this, and it was great. The book is coming out next month, and I'm excited to read the final version. 

You can also add Tracy's latest books to your shelves.

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Is it me, or are covers getting more beautiful? What makes you buy a book? Is it the first page, the blurb, or the cover? A combination?

Happy reading,

Martina

1st 5 Pages March Workshop - Seminara Rev 2

Name: Janis Seminara
Genre: Middle Grade, Science Fiction/ fantasy
Title: The Seedsower

Chapter 1: Discovery

A strange notion crossed Logan’s mind every time he hiked up the mountain; the notion that he had to go up in order to go back to the beginnings of things. All of the answers of life in Illium were obscured up there in the halo. He just knew they had to be. Logan had hoped the onset of spring would have set the beautiful fires-stars, Magnus’ golden flowers in bloom to brighten this hike, however the ever-present halo fixed atop Magnus’ summit hung darker than usual, feeling heavy, like wet clothes, spreading a gray mist over the entire valley. Creepy. He was close now; the familiar warning sign bobbed in and out of view. A few more steps and the threatening plea: ‘Danger - Do Not Enter ’ set against a red slashed triangle with a gray circle on its tip; a sorry rendition of the glorious mountain and her ominous halo. Logan laughed out loud; how many times had he made it in and out, no problem? Of course he only went a few feet in, always inching his way a bit more every time, nonetheless, it did stand true. Many a hiker disappeared in that halo in hopes to reach the ever-elusive summit or to make a new scientific discovery. Corey Blane, one of Knowledge Gate’s most promising scholars disappeared ten years ago. He had been sure, much like Logan was sure, that the halo held scientific secrets. Logan had been practicing getting in an out for years, and he knew just how to do it; a well-planned lunch on Logan’s part of Uncle Hephaestus’ favorite meat-cakes, and sweeties – a special delicacy of sugar and fruit and Hephaestus would be out cold, slumped against a boulder, just long enough for Logan to do some exploring.

Logan rested his walking stick up against the backside of the sign. He wouldn’t need it now; the trail fell flatter in the halo, and quite softer. Today the air had a strong chemical odor and taste to it. Logan knew all about chemicals, he had been top Chemistry student at the Knowledge Gate School three years in a row. Final projects were due in just under a month, and he still hadn’t decided on what to do. In the name of Science, he just had to hike in the forbidden zone. Perhaps he would discover a new element. His secret goal was to discover what compounds made up the halo, then to break them down and eventually disintegrate the halo so the summit would be free. Logan wished for nothing more than to be Illium’s greatest scientist; the one and only who cracked the code of the halo so he could be the first to reach Magnus’ summit. What a wondrous way to celebrate the centennial of his world! His heart pounded with excitement.

The halo thickened the further he went, hanging like an iron door. He had taken just ten more steps in than the last hike and yet whatever gases made up the halo seemed to be eating up the oxygen. He threw his pack down and took out a telescoping shovel he had rigged up himself. He figured he’d need height on the dig, in case he had to use his foot to shove it deeper into the ground. The air seemed to choke him with the least bit of exertion. Logan kicked the spade shaped blade of the shovel down into the ground, gripping steady onto the shaft. The air choked him with the least bit of exertion. He wasn’t sure, but it almost felt as if the ground pulled back at him. He pulled the shovel out, and then shoved it back in the same place this time, using his heel on the tip of the blade to give it a good kick so it would go deeper. Again! He was sure the ground pulled the shovel back. He let go of the shovel, and it spun in a complete circle then fell backwards to the ground, leaving a gaping hole no more than a few feet deep. Something shone back at him, even in the drab gray mist, something caught his eye. Without thinking, he fell to his knees and dug his hands into the soft reddish soil to grab the illusive object. The ground grabbed his hands, deeper and deeper until he was both elbows in. Gasping for air, his head dizzied and pounded and he couldn’t get his hands to move.

“Ouch!” The mountain let go and Logan sprung backwards. He felt a warm liquid oozing down his hand. Stuck inside his index finger was a blue shard, about two inches wide by three inches long. Logan winced. He’d have to pull it out. It had gone in pretty deep – almost straight through. He braced himself; goose bumps traveled up his arm. “One, two…” gasp, “Three.” Logan clenched his teeth through the pain. With his free hand he fished around his pack for something to wrap around the wound and stop the bleeding. It hurt plenty and within seconds, blood soaked through the thin yellow cloth his mom had wrapped his meat-cake with. He wiped the shard across his shirt to examine it.

The stone had four sides, sort of free form, transparently blue in some places, deep cobalt blue in others. The edges were sharp and clear, except for the red stain where Logan’s blood deposited. It felt weightless, and so wrapping his fingers around it secured him that it was truly there; Logan wondered what molecules made up the mass of it, what atoms made the molecules, and then what? Where did this shard come from? It felt as if Magnus herself handed it to him. Could it be from Before? Whatever this shard was, he’d soon find out. His fingers itched to start experimenting. A roll of thunder quaking through the halo made it even darker. The odor became much stronger now, and he could taste sulfur. He slipped the shard in his pocket with his other hand, tucking it carefully into the deepest corner, and then patted the outside of the pocket to make sure it stayed put. When his breathing became normal, he headed back out of the halo. He couldn’t show his uncle, just in case there were any consequences from the Board, he didn’t want Hephaestus to get in trouble. Soon the heavy veil dissolved into a soft mist. He went for his walking stick, but it wasn’t exactly where he left it. Instead, Uncle Hephaestus, leaning against the sign, waved the stick above his head and he didn’t look very happy.

“So, you did it again?” Hephaestus’ shiny, bald head shimmered with a soft covering of mist in-line with the halo on the Warning sign. Logan couldn’t help but laugh.

“You think it’s funny?”

Logan pointed to the sign. “No it’s just that the sign behind you…you looked like you had a halo.” Hephaestus shook his head, looking even unhappier with every passing second. “C’mon Uncle Hephy…” Even addressing his uncle affectionately didn’t alter Hephaestus’ grin. He held out Logan’s walking stick with his short, muscular arms. Oak chips showered Logan’s hand as he grabbed it with his right hand, placing his left hand quickly behind his back. Logan tried to avert Hephaestus’ round, steady eyes, but Hephaestus held steadfast onto the stick.

“I notched it. This is our 26th hike.” Hephaestus folded his arms, tilting his head to the side.

“Twenty-four, I don’t count the ones I actually didn’t walk my own way.” He matched his uncle’s grin, angry now that the one person in all of Illium he thought would understand suddenly didn’t. Now he was sure he wouldn’t show him the stone.

“Well, nevertheless, whether I held you or not, two hikes for every year.”

Logan barely recalled those earliest hikes, when Uncle Hephy would wrap him up like a package and tie him to his back. They didn’t hike very far, but Logan remembered the way the mountain smelled sweet in the spring and bitter in the fall. As he grew older, the hikes became longer and longer, until Logan had reached the warning sign. Then came the day Logan had finally stepped into the halo; he had just turned ten. Uncle Hephy had fallen asleep after over- indulging in sweeties. Logan had been just inside the halo a few feet, and for only a few minutes, and yet he totally recalled how his body trembled with excitement from head to toe, how he felt like he belonged there. He had heard Uncle’s hysterical cries, and really had wanted to get out and assure him that he was fine, but the feeling in the air, and the opaqueness of whatever the halo was made up of fascinated him. He wanted to dissect it, taste it, study it. Logan still felt that way. For some crazy reason, Logan had a knowing about this mountain; a knowing that the halo held secrets about the Before. Before Illium. Before this beautiful mountain ever existed. But the Before was forbidden in Illium. Perhaps that is why the Halo existed. Could the Board have created it? Logan would use science as a way to get some answers. Science was acceptable in Illium, and so Logan chuckled, “I’ll beat them at their own game!”

Hephaestus licked his lips, the softness returning to his eyes. “Those sweeties are irresistible kid. Gotta hand it to ya. Works every time.” He circled Logan, slowly checking every feature of his nephew. “So, what’s behind your back?”

Before Logan could swing his hand away, Hephaestus caught his cuff.

“Now, how am I going to explain that to your mother?” He grabbed Logan’s hand closer, gently touching the bloodied yellow wrap.

“Tell her that you’re teaching me how to carve walking sticks.”

“Now you know I can’t say that.” Hephaestus slowly opened the yellow cloth and heaved through his teeth. “She’d kill me if she thought I was teaching you contraband.”

“But you can carve walking sticks.” Logan grabbed his hand back and re-wrapped it.

“I’m not a scientist. My job is to make walking sticks so people will use their vouchers to buy ‘em. Your job is Science.” Hephaestus drew an imaginary circle with his hands. “The wheels of progress go round and round. We do what we do for Illium.” Suddenly, his eyes grew serious. “You’ll get the two of us rafted, and that would break Naira’s heart.” A chill shook Logan to the bone because he knew Uncle was right. Getting ‘rafted’ meant removal from family and friends, tied to a raft and set out to sea, alone. Who could survive? Nobody ever came back; in fact much like the haloed-summit, no one had ever seen the sea. If the halo doesn’t kill you, the Board will. Logan threw back his shoulders, suddenly justified in his secret trips through the halo. He’d be careful. His mother would never find out. But he wouldn’t stop. Not until he stood atop the summit.

“Beside, Naira would never forgive me.” Hephaestus’ doughy wrinkles drooped so heavily over his eyes, his bulbous nose, and pouting lips jutted. “She’d never forgive me.”

Logan shook the thought out of his head. The thought that occurred to him every time Hephaestus said his mother’s name like that. He knew they weren’t related, but he also knew his mother had broken her pairing, and that under the rules…


1st 5 Pages March Workshop - Kroepfl Rev 2

Name: Jim Kroepfl
Genre: Middle Grade Historical Fantasy
Title: Kannihut and the Dying Land

Kannihut focused on the low sky. He was sure this time. The strange light glowed in the distance, reaching up into the sky in long orange streaks, silhouetting the trees. But it was dusk and the light was in the north, like a brother to the sun, threatening to bring a completely different day. The glow came from the hills beyond the lake village, out near the mysterious island where the Spirit Father lived.

Kannihut wanted to put it out of his mind, but lately he’d seen the glow more and more, and each time the wrongness of it gnawed at him deeper. He was wondering if he dared to bring it up again when his older brother’s command broke through his thoughts.

“Kannihut, pay attention,” Willisaw hissed. “If we miss a deer, Gishgoo will tie us to a tree and leave us for the Hill People.” Before, Willisaw was known for his humor; now, Kannihut wasn’t even sure if he was joking about Gishgoo. Kannihut wasn’t sure about much anymore; he never seemed to do right in his brother’s eyes.

Kannihut shifted his legs and tried to focus on spotting deer. He and Willisaw had been crouching at the edge of the dry lakebed for hours. The thin layer of mud on their skins was beginning to crack and break away, making him itch all over. The small pond had attracted deer throughout the spring, but it was almost gone now and not many deer came anymore.

“Let me take the first shot today, Willisaw,” Kannihut whispered. He wasn’t as good as Willisaw, but he was better than most boys with eleven winters.

Willisaw shook his head as he watched the clearing. “No. We can’t miss.”

Kannihut took one more look at the northern sky. The strange glow was gone. He could just make out a patch of flowers at the opposite edge of the lakebed, tiny red and purple dots in front of a stand of young spruce. As he stared at the flowers’ vibrant colors, he felt a strange quivering inside. An area in the trees looked different from the rest, greener and brighter, as if lit by sunshine, and as he stared, the leaves stood out even more and began to shimmer.

Willisaw turned to look behind them as Gishgoo, Kaak and the dog came out of the forest. Kaak was the clan’s best hunter and had spent more time in the woods than anyone. The dog, which Kaak refused to name, stood next to him as it always did, its light brown fur and white face blending into the underbrush, its paws covered with mud to block its scent from dabbing the ground.

“Let’s go,” Gishgoo said. “It’s too hot. All the deer are deep in the forest.”

Willisaw stood, but Kannihut stayed crouching, staring at the trembling colors.

“Come on, Kannihut,” Willisaw said with hushed impatience.

Kannihut couldn’t take his eyes away from the vivid shimmering in the trees. “Wait,” he said in a whisper, wondering if he should ask the others if they saw it, too. Then he thought better of it. These men were hunters; they noticed the smallest movement in the brush. The area was too bright, too prominent to be missed—if it was real.

“We’re leaving,” Gishgoo commanded while a smitch of dried mud fell from the downturned corners of his mouth. As he turned his well-muscled back, the dog’s ears shot up and it focused on the same area in the trees that held Kannihut’s gaze.

Kaak followed the dog’s eyes. “Look,” he whispered.

A young buck moved out of the trees and took tentative steps into the meadow. Slow as glaciers the hunters put arrows to the gut and raised their bows. The deer was out of range but coming toward them. It had four points and a unique diamond-shaped patch of white at the base of its neck.

Willisaw moved back into a crouch and held up a finger, signaling that he would shoot first. Without moving his head, he glanced at Kannihut and winked, looking for just a moment like the old Willisaw, before they lost everything. The deer stopped in the middle of the lakebed and looked in all directions, smelling the breeze for danger, its white tail twitching. It took a few more tentative steps toward the hunters as they pulled hard against their bows.

Kannihut held his breath as he strained to hold his bow in place, but his arm started trembling. He glanced at Willisaw’s arm, steady as rock. Kannihut thought about the blue ink marking of a Water Panther on Willisaw’s bicep, the one he kept covered with mud, even when he wasn’t hunting.

When Willisaw let out a reproachful breath and Kannihut knew the warning was meant for him. He pulled his thoughts back to the deer and willed himself to steady his shaking arm.

Hurry, he thought as the burning in his muscles grew. The hunters waited until the buck had its head down and its side toward them.

Thrum!

Willisaw’s tortured bow let out a muffled sigh as it snapped back into shape, slinging the arrow across the lakebed. At the sound, the others released their bows and three more arrows shot toward the deer. Two struck it in the neck and one in the back haunch. Kannihut’s arrow sailed just over its back, which he knew everyone noticed. The buck dashed into the forest, limping, and the hunters burst out of the brush and ran after it.

Willisaw, running at full speed, pointed as the deer ran down a dry creek bed. The hunters instinctively shifted in that direction, the dog alongside them. Kannihut tried to keep up but was soon far behind, even though he followed at a dead run. He stopped at the bottom of a hill to catch his breath and that was when he saw the deer.

It had four-pointed antlers and a diamond marking on its chest. As it came over the hill, the buck wasn’t limping and no blood stained its hide. It noticed Kannihut and calmly stared at him with its dark liquid eyes. Time stood still while Kannihut admired the fearless animal—until he remembered his purpose. He slowly raised his bow, breaking the delicate bond between them. At the movement, the buck turned and sprang back over the hill. Kannihut ran after it, his bow ready, but when he reached the crest the deer was gone. There was only a wide empty meadow and no place for the buck to disappear.

Kannihut looked at the ground where the deer had stood. It had to have been a different deer, he rationalized, not entirely believing it. He needed to catch up with the others and he almost called out to them, but then remembered the dangers of this part of the forest. He managed to find the faint trail that led to Willisaw, Kaak, and Gishgoo. They were at the edge of a nearby meadow, gutting the deer.

When he approached, Kaak looked up and laughed. “It’s our own great hunter,” he said. “Better eyes than a hawk.”

The others laughed, except Gishgoo who gave Kannihut a stern look. “It’s about time you showed up,” he said.

“Willisaw, did the deer double-back toward the forest?” Kannihut asked.

“No, we followed it straight on.”

Kannihut stared at the deer’s face, now lifeless as a carving. It was the same fearless deer, he was sure of it, but how could that be?

The hunters burned the deer’s heart to help its spirit rise to the sky, then tied the carcass to a drag of long branches and took turns pulling it back to camp. Kannihut tried helping, but was quickly replaced when he struggled. On the way, the men retold the story of the hunt, teasing Kannihut for his stubbornness.

“Now animals will fear you every time you wander into the forest,” Kaak said laughing. “You might even make a pretty good dog one day.”

Willisaw laughed with Kaak and gave his brother a good-natured swat across the head. Kannihut didn’t want to ruin Willisaw’s rare good mood by telling him about his mysterious deer. He didn’t believe him about the light, and another strange story might set him off. Today, he had helped with the hunt and, in his own way, Gishgoo seemed pleased. Kannihut would act happy and maybe tomorrow his arrow would hit a deer and he’d be a real hunter. Then he wouldn’t have to worry if he and Willisaw could stay with Beaver Clan. He would have a home.


1st 5 Pages March Workshop - Harris-Brady Rev 2

Heather Harris-Brady
Middle Grade Contemporary Mystery
The Mis(s)fits: All That Glitters

Lost treasure never goes out of style

Sometimes summer vacation isn’t so great, especially when you have to leave your best friend and move to a place where everyone looks at you like you have two heads. Then say the only hope you have of getting your old life back is a letter from a strange dead woman. Your chances are now as slim as a pencil skirt.

Like the back of a very old hand reaching from beyond the grave, the spidery blue veins of handwriting fanned through the letter’s waxy yellow paper in the depths of the sleek chrome trash can. One line, added to the envelope with a typewriter, stood out like a black tattoo.

“I am here, my dear, to offer you the chance of a lifetime.- Mabel Caylor, White Birch Cove”

Mabel Caylor came by her reputation as a spy with good reason. She always knew too much. Certainly she knew one is not always in the mood to say yes to the chance of a lifetime – especially when one is a twelve-year-old girl.

Chapter One: A New Season, A New Vision

On Saturday June 21 a cotton-sundress day radiated hope, happiness and promise over Manhattan, yet in the back room of a boutique on Central Park West one sixth-grade designing duo was ripping apart at the seams.

“I guess that’s it,” Celia Narro said, stroking the silver nailhead trim on her pink velvet chair. Her fingertips, rough with pricks from needlework, caught on the soft fabric. These two velvet chairs (one pink one purple), two silver nameplates (Aracelia Francisca Narro – Accessory Designer, Indira Devi Prabshan – Jewelry Designer), and two lifelong best friends with matching mirrored desks made up Narshan headquarters. One desk now stood empty beside several overflowing boxes as the relaxing hum of shopping floated back from the front of the Prabshans’ boutique.

“Are you sure you don’t want any of these pictures?” Indira said, waving at the wall of designer portraits. Chanel, Westwood, Rodriguez, Galliano, Lagerfeld, McQueen and McCartney looked comfortably at home on the pink silk wallpaper. Their favorite, the time they photobombed the Gossip Girls on set, had a soft light over it.

“Keep them for me. I’ll be back.” As Celia bit her lip and reached for a tissue Indira pulled a little tent card out of her purse and put in the middle of her desk: Reserved for Celia Narro.

“I knew you’d say that! There, it’s official!" Her eye caught a glimpse of a yellowed letter in the trash. "Hey – you’re not throwing this out are you?”

Mysterious treasures and love, pure Indira catnip! Celia knew she wouldn’t this slide.

“C’mon Indi.” Plucking the letter out she unfolded the crackling page and launched into a quavery old-lady voice.

“If you are reading this then it is at least 2014 and you shall be the next girl to live in my house, which pleases me very much. It is likely haunted but by the living not the dead. I left a great treasure for you along with what I fear is a great responsibility. You cannot accept one without the other. Being the sentimental old biddy I am I hope you will also find love during your search as I did during mine.”

She paused, waiting for a mocking laugh. Instead, Indira hung on every word, dark eyes shining.

“Go on!” she said, bouncing up and down.

“Although I have never lacked for imagination I cannot picture what your world must be. Perhaps all girls are free to learn, work and find their own happiness. If, however, the past is still vanishing in White Birch Cove there's no time to waste. Once the house is open the Triangle vultures will begin to circle. Start at the museum with my quilt. Death is so terribly inconvenient, you’ll have to finish this for me. Mabel Caylor” Celia tossed it onto the desk.

“It doesn’t even make sense. Like a total stranger is going to leave me a fortune. Get real.”

“But what if it IS real? It’s like a movie – you’ll be the princess coming to reclaim her treasure and find her prince!” Indira broke into her favorite dance move, teasing a smile out of her friend.

“I knew that Bollywood marathon last night was a bad idea,” Celia said with a laugh. “It’s just someone messin’ with me. I’ll be the new kid. They want me to show up and start asking questions like a total dorkapotomas. I’m not falling for it.”

The movers slammed the door on their way out with Celia’s boxes. The chandelier tinkled in protest overhead as a tiny gilt frame crashed to the floor. Celia picked it up. The quote slid around in her cold clammy palms. With the right pair of shoes a girl can change the world. Her parents gave it to her when Narshan opened. What's so great about change anyway, she thought. Change stinks.

Her parents were big on change but they were usually all talk. She never imagined they would actually go through with this whole move-to-the-country fiasco, especially after the miserable visit over spring break. With the stores closed until May even the weather gave up, spending the week in the sloppy, drizzly equivalent of worn gray lounge pants. Welcome to White Birch Cove - the place dreams go to die.

“Seriously, they might as well just lock me up,” Celia said, cracking her gum like a whip as they walked to the door. “I mean, a FARM and a restaurant in the middle of nowhere! Can you even?” She paused for effect. “Now do I look like a farmer?” she asked with one of her typical grand gestures.

Indira put on her Fake Serious Face. From the glossy black blow-out under her hat, past the necklaces rippling down her back, to the soles of her designer sandals this girl was a born New Yorker from head to toe. Indira shook her head.

“And does this look like a farm dog?” This time they both laughed because there was no way to even picture Coco’s handful of Yorkie fluff anywhere other than these upholstered brownstone streets. Coco wagged her tail. She liked attention even if she didn’t always understand it. Indira’s laugh trailed away as they turned to take the long way home, dipping through Central Park. She built up her courage over a few silent hair-twisting blocks before bubbling over in front of the Shakespeare Garden.

“Cee, I don't want to make you mad but you’d better hope that letter’s right about the treasure.” Her words picked up speed, snowballing downhill. “You’re going to find out anyway so you might as well hear it from me - the Designers Institute is having a Teen Runway Rockstar competition this summer. The winner gets a trip to Paris.” With this bomb Indira put her hands over her eyes and peeked out through the bunker of her manicure.

“You have GOT to be kidding me!” Celia shouted. “That is SO not fair! Somebody else is going to get OUR big break!” She whipped off her hat and sent it twirling into the water. An impish breeze, scented with Belgian waffles and hot dogs, answered by lifting her black bangs and skipping sunshine sparkles across the surface of the pond.

“Why are they doing this now? I can't believe it. I’ve wanted to be a designer my whole life!”

“Maybe it’s just not meant to be. We'll get another chance.”

“Lemme think for a minute. There’s got to be a way. I’m not giving up that easy.” Celia plucked blades of grass one by one and threw them like arrows toward the invisible demon of unfairness.

“There's only one thing to do,” she said. “I'm not thirteen until February. You need to enter it for me.”

“My mom's a member of the Institute. I can't.”

“We'll say we're from Queens or something. They don’t know every girl in the city. This has got our name written all over it!”

“I don't know Cee. Cheaters never prosper.” Indira toyed with her wrist-load of thin bracelets. “You know my parents, if they find out I’ll be SO busted. I don’t even want to think about what they would do.”

“Look at it this way. Would you rather make up a new designer and go to Paris or go to school with Hilde Essen after she wins?”

“Okay, you’ve talked me into it,” Indira said. “I'm down. But you HAVE to back me up on this, you can’t leave me hanging once you’re gone!”

“You’re the best Indi - we are going to set this town on fy-yaah!” Celia said, spinning to her feet. “You know you can count on me. Grab my hand a sec, I need to rescue that hat.”

As Indira held on to her left hand, Celia stretched out over the edge of the pier. As she brushed the brim her cell flipped over the edge of her pocket like Jacques Cousteau. With one soft plop it sank like a stone.

“Oh my god! That’s it, I’m cursed. Didn’t I tell you Hilde gave me the stink eye? This is officially the worst day EVER.” And it wasn't even lunchtime yet. “Let’s get going, maybe I can get padre to stop for a new phone before we leave.” All too soon they reached Indira’s doorman Amara who, like all good doormen, knew exactly how much time each tenant required for their hellos and goodbyes.

“I can't believe you're really going! Text as soon as you’re over the bridge,” Indira said, with one last lemongrass-scented hug. Sparkling tears dangled from her minky lashes. “Remember, you've got to be back by Labor Day, or sooner! Just do what the letter says, use the treasure to pay your way back.”

“Treasure or no treasure I’m going to find a way back here as soon as I can, whatever it takes. That's a promise.” Her voice, low and fierce, could have belonged to someone else. With eyes unfashionably moist the girls parted with the secret handshake they’d started in second grade. This was the first time Celia walked away wondering if they would ever see each other again. She didn’t even notice Indira’s graceful hand slipping the strange letter into her shoulder bag.



1st 5 Pages March Workshop - Baird Rev 2

Name: Jeri Baird
Genre: Middle Grade Fantasy
Title: Fly True

I am called by many names. Destiny, Fate, Fortune; however I prefer Moira, for it sounds as if I have a heart.

I do not.

I oversee human destinies, and all things happen exactly as I intend. Some try to deceive me, but I am Moira, and I will not be cheated.


CHAPTER ONE
1300 ENGLAND
ADANNA

Adanna woke to the yeasty smell of baking bread. For most, that scent would comfort, but for one who woke to that odor every day of her life, it symbolized everything Adanna wished to flee. She hated her mother for working long hours and then falling into bed exhausted. She hated how the smell permeated her clothes and her hair, such that when walking in the street strangers would identify her as the baker’s daughter. And she hated that she had eleven months and four days before she would complete the quest and leave the bakery.

A basket of embroidery lay on the woven coverlet from Adanna’s bed. The yellow thread sprawled over the covers. Like most nights, she’d fallen asleep stitching. As she settled the basket on her nightstand and threw the covers to the side, an errant needle jabbed into her thumb. She pressed against the spot of blood with a finger. It wasn’t the first time she’d pricked herself.

“Adanna?”

She jumped, surprised to see her mother standing at the door. Flour smudged her face, and her hair glistened from the hot ovens. Dark circles underlined her eyes reminding Adanna of the late nights she worked. She had her mother’s golden hair. Her dark eyes surely came from a father she knew nothing of, and of whom her mother would tell her nothing. A familiar sense of loss overwhelmed her, and she sighed.

“It’s your special day.” Her mother held a bun with sugared icing. Cinnamon, a precious commodity in the bakery, dusted the top.

It tickled Adanna’s nose, and her mouth watered. She smiled. “Thank you, Mother.”

Her mother smoothed her apron. “You’re twelve now. Almost to your time of magic. Are you excited?”

Not wishing to reveal that she’d been counting the days until the first of the new year, Adanna shrugged.

Searching her face, her mother sighed. “Soon everything will be perfect again.”

What was her mother thinking? When had her life been perfect?

“There’s much you can’t understand until you’ve completed the quest. When you return…” her mother paused, and Adanna noticed her slight shudder. “…and Fate has chosen the bakery as your apprenticeship, everything will be as it should.”

Adanna crossed her arms. “Mother! Are you worried I won’t return from the quest?” When her mother paled, she knew it to be true. “How could you think I would fail? Really, Mother! Do you think so little of me?”

“No, no, of course, I don’t doubt your return.” She twisted her hands. “You just need to be careful in this year to gain tokens. You mustn’t tempt Fate.”

“Fate? What does Fate care about me?” Adanna’s gut tightened. What would she do if Fate did choose the bakery for her?

As her mother picked at the dough under her nails, Adanna suspected she hid something. But then, she had her own secrets, and apprenticing anywhere except in the bakery was one of them. She took a deep breath to calm her thudding heart and nibbled at the bun. “It’s wonderful, Mother. Thank you.”

Smiling, her mother caressed Adanna’s hair. “I’ve invited Marigold to feast with us tonight. I’ve started a rabbit stew. We’ll have cake, as well.”

“Yes, Mother. Thank you.”

Turning to leave, her mother looked back. “Less than a year now, Adanna. I promise everything will be better.”

“Yes, Mother. It will be better.”

Adanna had her own plan that she shared with no one. Not her best friend Marigold, not her favored teacher, and not her mother, who would be shocked to know her daughter capable of such thoughts. With a small favor from the fortune teller and some magic, Adanna felt confident she could pull it off.

She would not be a baker, whatever Fate might say.

CHAPTER TWO
ZANDER

Zander woke on his birthday, restless as he often woke. He had dreamed of bread. Not eating it, as he always had plenty of bread to eat, although its source remained a mystery. Sometimes he woke to loaves on their table, as if they sprouted there in the night. That morning, a small round bun with white icing sprinkled with a golden brown powder appeared as if by magic. Zander had quit asking his father about the bread when he realized the lie changed each time he answered.

No, the yeasty aroma of bread filled Zander’s dreams. A dream that compelled him to leave his home at the age of five in search of the source. After hunting the streets his father found Zander standing in front of a bakery in tears. He’d carried him home, tucked in strong arms that held Zander’s head to his chest. It was the only tenderness Zander remembered from his father.

Uneasy and eager to hunt, anxious to retreat into the forest, away from his father’s unpredictable moods, Zander dressed in simple brown pants and pulled a matching tunic over his white undershirt. He only knew it his birthday because the night before, in a rare mood of cheerfulness, his drunken father had given him a present of a new bow and a dozen arrows.

Zander startled to his father waking from the mat on the other side of the small room. Glassy eyed and stumbling, he stood in the sparse light from the single window.

“Twelve today. Almost a man. It won’t be long now until you begin your time of magic.”

Heart pounding, Zander stilled himself as he’d learned in hunting, so as not to give away his excitement. “I’ll be participating?”

When he’d first learned of the time of magic, hope had pushed the dark from the corners of his heart revealing a dream he had not dared to imagine. Everything depended on Fate knowing of his existence and demanding his participation in the quest, as she required of all the twelve year old children.

“There’s no cheating Fate, Son.” His father rubbed at his eyes. “She’s a foul mistress. You’ll be participating, no matter how hard I’ve tried to pretend otherwise these last ten years.”

His father referred often to the last ten years, yet would not speak of Zander’s first two years of life. He guessed that his mother had died. That would explain the ale his father consumed.

Zander wondered about many things. Why they lived far from the village in the two room cruck house, made of criss-crossed twigs, mud, and straw plaster when he knew they weren’t poor. Why his father forbade him to attend church or school or the festivals. Why he had his father’s dark hair, but blue eyes that looked nothing like him.

He accepted that he would not understand.

“You’re well prepared for five days in the forest. You’ll come back alive.” His father rubbed his forehead. “And then there’s a chance, a small chance, our life will be good again.”

Zander couldn’t remember a time he would call his life good, however when he returned from the quest he would have a chance at happiness. Knowing now that he would participate in the time of magic, he hoped that Fate would honor his dream.

1st 5 Pages March Workshop - Keitel Rev 2


Name: Kindra Keitel
Genre: Young Adult Paranormal
Title: Voice Lessons

It was there again, the metallic sting that bit her throat every time music crossed her mind. She knew better than to try to actually sing, that only made it worse, made her cough and gag with what tasted like a mouth full of pennies. So, she cleared her throat, swallowed hard, and nestled deeper into the old rocking chair. The cinnamon lullabies of her childhood still hung heavy in the air and Delphine knew she’d never have another chance to memorize them.

Her mom used to sing a lot, less and less toward the end and then not at all. When she was small, the songs quieted Delphine’s fears, comforted her in a way that spoken words could not. But their soothing effect waned as they became increasingly violent, torturing her with nothing more than whispered melodies. Her mother disconnected the doorbell two years ago, gave away the radio and the TV. They hadn’t been to a movie in months. She forbade concerts and plays, downloads and speakers, dancing and all of Christmas. She made it her life’s work to limit Delphine’s pain.

What her mom didn’t know was how much Delphine ached to hear the few stray notes that would inevitably fall from her mother’s mouth. She didn’t know how Delphine would sit on the floor outside the bathroom when she was in the shower, how she was waiting for her to forget and let the downy strains drift under the door. Even though the two of them agreed removing music from their lives would be for the better, nothing could quell the pulse of song hidden just under Delphine’s skin. And no matter how much music hurt, there was nothing she wanted more.

She stood from the rocker for the last time, wincing at the sing-song creak of its joints. She locked the front door and stored away the click it made, chipped off a piece of peeling white paint from the doorknob and put it in her pocket. The house she and her mother had shared was small, so small it begged pardon for being there at all. Grayed siding held thin walls together and the windows held their breath; the cracked sidewalk below beckoned their glass with a wrinkle and a wink.

She watched it all disappear through the back window of the car and fully realized she wasn’t Delphine Martin anymore. She never was, not really. All this time, she’d been Delphine Lockhart without knowing it. Her mom knew, though. It was all her idea, passing down her maiden name and hiding estranged relatives in plain sight.

Tsk-tsk-tsk. Tsk-chick-tsk-chick, she clucked her tongue to drown out the hum of tires against the pavement. Though the subtle whine of everyday sounds like car tires, vacuums and blenders didn’t hurt, there was a melody there, hidden below the mundane, that made her uncomfortable. If music was religion, her tuneless chanting was secular reproach.

The whine grew louder and Delphine battled harder against it until both sounds were interrupted by the static twang of a country guitar.

“Mom.” Sophie snapped off the radio and shook her head at her mother, a severe frown emphasizing the reprimand.

“Oh, God, I forgot.” Cate bit her lip and glanced in the rearview mirror, catching Delphine’s eye. “I’m sorry, honey.”

Sophie had become a kind of buffer between Delphine and the world. She softened the effect it had on her, shielded her from the constant cacophony of life. And when merely camouflaging music was no longer enough, when Delphine begged for Sophie’s earbuds long enough to hear just one song, she was there to hold both hands in a tight sister grip while Delphine cried. She understood the chaos music was to her, how Delphine feared it, how it burned her on the inside and how she yearned for it just the same.

“This can’t be it,” Sophie said when they paused outside a gated lawn. “We’re not even out of town yet. I thought it was somewhere in the country.”

"This is where the GPS sent us.” Cate flicked the little screen on the dashboard.

So, Delphine was suddenly one of them, part of the family that lived in that big brick house in the same little Missouri town she grew up in. The house with the tall iron gates and foot soldier pines lining the yard. The house everybody talked about but nobody ever visited.

“I can’t believe she did this to me,” Delphine said from the backseat. “First, she dies and then she sends me to live with monsters.” She snorted. “At least I’ll fit in with the freak show.”

Sophie pulled down her visor and looked at her friend in the mirror. “You’re not a freak.” She smoothed down her hair and went to work on the small red bulge near her chin. “I wouldn’t be best friends with a freak,” she said, her mouth twisted to the side.

Cate reached back and patted Delphine’s knee.

Delphine tied a knot in the tissue she’d had in her hand for hours.

Every time she asked to meet her dead father’s family, her mother refused, something about the whole family disowning the two of them when Delphine’s father died. Her mom couldn’t say anything about meeting them now, though; she was dead too. And that gap, the one that always stood between them, now it was an impossible abyss.

Delphine promised herself that even though she was bound to these strangers by blood, she wouldn’t let them change her, wouldn’t let them make her forget. She’d make sure they knew everything they had forsaken almost sixteen years ago.

Cate parked the car and craned her neck trying to see the top of the house. “Sophie honey, you want to double check the address?”

Sophie fished in her purse for the scrap of paper. She tossed a tin of mints, a tube of mascara and a Sharpie under the windshield before she found it.

Cate compared the crumpled note to the brass numbers beside the front door. “Hm.”

“It’s right,” Delphine said without looking. She’d known about this house all her life, though living in it was the last thing she ever expected to do.

Sophie turned around and faced her friend. “So, you think the stories are true then?”

Delphine swallowed. “Guess I’m going to find out.”

“Of course they’re not true.” Cate flipped Sophie’s visor back into place with a snap. “It’s just a big house.”

“A big house with a witch inside.”

“Enough, Sophie.” Cate reached for Delphine’s hand. “That’s just it: they’re stories, there’s nothing to them.” She smiled. “You get to live in the biggest house in the county and you got yourself a brand-new family.”

A tear pooled between the rim of Delphine’s sunglasses and her cheek.

Cate squeezed her hand. “I know, honey.” She squeezed again because motherly gestures were what made Cate Cate.

“There she is.” Sophie leaned toward the glass. “She’s old but hey, at least her skin’s not green or anything.”

Elizabeth Lockhart, her skin a respectable wrinkly pink, shaded her eyes with one hand and waved at the car with the other.

“I don’t believe it,” said Delphine. “I saw her at the funeral.”

“She was there?” said Cate.

“Yeah. She stood in the back and cried. She never got anywhere near me.”

“See,” Sophie said, “now don’t you think that’s weird? Just a little bit?”

The three of them looked at each other and opened their doors in unison. They unloaded Delphine’s bags and piled them on the paved driveway.

“Do you hear that?” Delphine gestured toward an enthusiastic mockingbird hopping across the cement.

“Get out of here, you stupid bird.” Sophie stomped toward the stubborn creature.

Delphine grabbed her arm. “But you hear it?”

“Of course I do. The little brat won’t shut up.” She waved her arms and stomped closer until it finally flew away. Once the threat was gone, she looked at Delphine over her shoulder. “You okay?”

She didn’t know how to answer. The bird’s song didn’t carry the bitter burn she’d come to expect. It was like no other sound she remembered; it was sweet. And she had been thirsty for it all her life.


Monday, March 11, 2013

1st 5 Pages March Workshop Revisions Are Posted

The first round of revisions are posted in our March workshop with guest mentor Tracy Deebs. What do you think? Check out Tracy's suggestions and the other notes on the last round along with the original entries, and then read the revision. Tell us what you think? Is the new revision more intriguing, more readable, more compelling? What else needs work?

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Happy writing! :)

Martina and Lisa

1st 5 Pages March Workshop - Harris-Brady Rev1


Heather Harris-Brady
Contemporary Middle Grade Mystery
The Mis(s)fits: All That Glitters


“I am here, my dear, to offer you the chance of a lifetime.”

Like the back of a very old hand reaching from beyond the grave, you could see the spidery blue veins of handwriting through the waxy yellow paper.

“To my new young tenant,

If you are reading this then it is at least 2014 and you shall be the next girl to live in my house, which pleases me very much. It is likely haunted but by the living not the dead. I left a great treasure for you along with what I fear is a great responsibility. You cannot accept one without the other. It's waiting for a clever girl who uses both her heart and her head. Being the sentimental old biddy I am I hope you will also find love during your search as I did during mine.

Although I have never lacked for imagination I cannot picture what your world must be. Perhaps all girls are free to learn, work and find their own happiness. If, however, the past is still vanishing in White Birch Cove there's no time to waste. Once the house is open the Triangle vultures will begin to circle. Start at the museum with my quilt. Death is so terribly inconvenient, it’s your turn now. Mabel Caylor”

A few residents of White Birch Cove had good reason to suspect Mabel Caylor had been a spy. Certainly she knew one is not always in the mood to say yes to the chance of a lifetime – especially when one is a twelve-year-old girl.

Chapter One: A New Season, A New Vision

On Saturday June 21 Mother Nature sent a cotton-sundress day down Manhattan’s runway – pure sunshine and happiness, but in the back room of a boutique on Central Park West one sixth-grade designing duo was ripping apart at the seams.

“I guess that’s everything,” Celia Narro said, running her fingers along the silver nailhead trim on the back of her pink velvet chair. Narshan headquarters consisted of two velvet chairs (one pink and one purple), two silver nameplates (Aracelia Francisca Narro – Accessory Designer, Indira Devi Prabshan – Jewelry Designer), and two lifelong best friends with matching mirrored desks. One desk now stood empty beside several overflowing boxes as the relaxing hum of shopping floated back from the front of the Prabshans’ boutique.

“Are you sure you don’t want any of these pictures?” Indira said, waving at the wall of designer portraits. Chanel, Westwood, Rodriguez, Galliano, Lagerfeld, McQueen and McCartney looked comfortably at home on the pink silk wallpaper.

“No, you keep them for me. I’ll be back.”

“I knew you’d say that!” Celia bit her lip and reached for a tissue as Indira pulled a little tent card out of her purse and put in the middle of her desk: Reserved for Celia Narro.

“There, it’s official! Hey – you’re not throwing this out are you?” Indira plucked Mabel Caylor’s yellowed letter out of the trash basket.

Mysterious treasures and love, pure Indira catnip! Celia knew she wouldn’t this slide.

“But what if it IS real? It’s like a movie – you’ll be the princess coming to reclaim her treasure and find her prince!” Indira broke into her favorite little dance move, teasing a smile out of her friend.

“You’d better cut back on the Bollywood Indi,” Celia said with a laugh. “It’s obviously just someone tryin’ to mess with me since I’ll be the new kid. They want me to show up and start asking questions like a total dorkapotomas. I’m not falling for it.”

The movers slammed the door on their way out with Celia’s boxes. The chandelier tinkled in protest overhead as a little gilt frame crashed to the floor. Celia picked it up. The quote slid around in her cold clammy palms. “With the right pair of shoes a girl can change the world.” Her parents gave it to her with the desk. What's so great about change anyway, she thought. Change stinks.

Her parents were big on change but they were usually all talk. She never imagined they would actually go through with this whole move-to-the-country fiasco, especially after the miserable visit over spring break. With the stores closed until May even the weather gave up, spending the week in the sloppy, drizzly equivalent of worn gray lounge pants. Welcome to White Birch Cove - the place dreams go to die.

“Seriously, they might as well just lock me in the basement,” Celia said, cracking her gum like a whip as they walked to the door. “I mean, a FARM and a restaurant in the middle of nowhere! Can you even? Now do I look like a farmer?” she asked with one of her typical grand gestures.

Indira put on her Fake Serious Face. From the glossy black blow-out under her hat, past the necklaces rippling down her back, to the soles of her designer sandals this girl was a born New Yorker from head to toe.

“Noooo. . .,” Indira said, dissolving into Celia’s favorite giggly laugh.

“And does this look like a farm dog?” This time they both laughed because there was no way to even picture Coco’s handful of Yorkie fluff anywhere other than these upholstered brownstone streets. Coco wagged her tail. She liked attention even if she didn’t always understand it. Indira’s laugh trailed away as they turned to take the long way home through the park. She built up her courage for a few silent hair-twisting blocks before bubbling over in front of the Shakespeare Garden.

“Cee, I don't want to make you mad but you’d better hope that letter’s right about the treasure.” Her words picked up speed, snowballing downhill. “You’re going to find out anyway so you might as well hear it from me - the Designers Institute is having a Teen Runway Rockstar competition this summer.” With this bomb Indira put her hands over her eyes and peeked out through the bunker of her manicure.

“You have GOT to be kidding me!” Celia shouted. “That is SO not fair! Somebody else is going to get OUR big break!” She whipped off her hat and sent it twirling into the water. An impish breeze, scented with Belgian waffles and hot dogs, lifted her black bangs and sent sunshine sparkles skipping across the surface of the pond.

“There's more,” Indira said. “The winner gets a trip to Paris to shop for materials.” Celia collapsed in a heap on to the soft green grass.

“Why are they doing this now? I can't believe it. I’ve wanted to be a designer my whole life!”

“I know! This just isn’t meant to be. Something else will work out.”

“Lemme think for a minute. There’s got to be a way. I’m not giving up that easy.” Celia plucked blades of grass one by one and threw them like arrows toward the invisible demon of unfairness.

“There's only one thing to do,” she said. “I'm not thirteen until February. You're going to have to enter.”

“My mom's a member of the Institute. I can't.”

“We'll make it work, say we're from Queens or something. They don’t know every girl in the city. This has got our name written all over it!”

“I don't know Cee. Cheaters never prosper.” Indira toyed with her wrist-load of thin bracelets. “You know my parents, if they find out I’ll be SO busted. I don’t even want to think about what they would do.”

“Look at it this way. Would you rather make up a new designer who's never existed or go to school with Hilde Essen after she comes back from Paris?”

“Okay, you win,” Indira said. “I'm down. But you HAVE to back me up on this, you can’t leave me hanging once you’re gone!”

“You’re the best Indi - we are going to set this town on fy-yaah!” Celia said, spinning to her feet. “You know you can count on me. Grab my hand will ya? We need to rescue that hat.”

As Indira held on to her left hand, Celia stretched out over the edge of the pier. Just as her fingertips brushed the brim her cell flipped over the edge of her pocket like Jacques Cousteau. One soft plop and it sank like a stone.

“Oh man! This is officially the worst day EVER.” And it wasn't even lunchtime yet. All too soon they reached Indira’s doorman Amara who, like all good doormen, knew exactly how much time each tenant required for their hellos and goodbyes.

“I can't believe you're really going - text as soon as you’re over the bridge,” Indira said, with one last lemongrass-scented hug. Sparkling tears dangled from her minky lashes. “Remember, you've got to be back by Labor Day, or sooner! Just do what the letter says, use the treasure to pay your way back.”

“My phone's taking a swim — remember? I’ll write you every day until I get a new one. Treasure or no treasure I’m going to find a way back here as soon as I can, whatever it takes. That's a promise.” Her voice, low and fierce, could have belonged to someone else. With eyes unfashionably moist, the girls parted with the secret handshake they’d started in second grade but this was the first time Celia walked away wondering if they would ever see each other again.

1st 5 Pages March Workshop - Seminara Rev 1

Name: Janis Seminara
Genre: Middle Grade, Science Fiction/ fantasy
Title: The Seedsower

Chapter 1: Discovery

The halo drooping over the summit hung darker than usual and felt heavy, like wet clothes. Logan had hoped the onset of spring might have lightened things up a bit; even the fires-stars, Magnus’ golden flowers hadn’t begun to shoot up from their earthy wombs. Creepy. He was close now; the familiar warning sign bobbed in and out of view. A few more steps and the threatening plea: ‘Danger - Do Not Enter the Halo’ set against a red slashed triangle with a gray circle on its tip; a sorry rendition of the glorious Mount Magnus and her ominous halo. Logan laughed out loud; how many times had he made it in and out, no problem? Of course he only went a few feet in, always inching his way a bit more every time, nonetheless, it did stand true. Many a hiker disappeared in that halo in hopes to reach the ever-elusive summit or to make a new scientific discovery. Corey Blane, one of Knowledge Gate’s most promising scholars disappeared ten years ago. Corey had been sure, much like Logan was sure, that the halo held scientific secrets. Logan had been practicing getting in an out for years, and he knew just how to do it; a well-planned lunch on Logan’s part of Uncle Hephaestus’ favorite meat-cakes, and sweeties – a special delicacy of sugar and fruit and Hephaestus would be out cold, slumped against a boulder, just long enough for Logan to do some exploring.

Logan rested his walking stick up against the backside of the sign. He wouldn't need it now; the trail fell flatter in the halo, and quite softer. Today the air had a strong chemical odor and taste to it. Logan knew all about chemicals, he had been top Chemistry student at the Knowledge Gate School three years in a row. Final projects were due in just under a month, and he still hadn't decided on what to do. In the name of Science, he just had to hike in the forbidden zone. Perhaps he would discover a new element. His secret goal was to discover what compounds made up the halo, then to break them down and eventually disintegrate the halo so the summit would be free. Logan wished for nothing more than to be Illium’s greatest scientist; the one and only who cracked the code of the halo so he could be the first to reach Magnus’ summit. His heart pounded with excitement.

The halo thickened the further he went, hanging like an iron door. He threw his pack down and took out a small shovel. The air seemed to almost choke him with the least bit of exertion. He had taken ten more steps in than the last time. Is this how Corey Blane felt before… Logan shrugged it off to having had very little sleep, and so he laid down, propping his pack under his head, mindlessly digging his hands into the soft reddish soil. Deeper and deeper he dug, his nails filling with the particles that made the mountain. He pictured these particles breaking down into molecules and the molecules into atoms, and then what?

“Ouch!” Logan sprung into a sitting position to examine his hand. He felt dizzy and a trickle of blood ran down his wrist. Stuck inside his index finger was a blue shard, about two inches wide by three inches long. Logan winced. He’d have to pull it out. It had gone in pretty deep – almost straight through. He braced himself; goose bumps traveled up his arm. “One, two…” gasp, “Three.” Logan clenched his teeth through the pain. With his free hand he fished around his pack for something to wrap around the wound and stop the bleeding. It hurt plenty and within seconds, blood soaked through the thin yellow cloth his mom had wrapped his meat-cake with. He wiped the shard across his shirt to examine it.

The stone had four sides, sort of free form, transparently blue in some places, deep cobalt blue in others. The edges were sharp and clear, except for the red stain where Logan’s blood deposited. Whatever this shard was, he’d soon find out. His fingers itched to start experimenting. A roll of thunder quaking through the halo made it even darker. The odor became much stronger now, and he could taste sulfur. He slipped the shard in his pocket and headed back out. He couldn't show his uncle, just in case there were any consequences from the Board, he didn't want Hephaestus to get in trouble. Soon the heavy veil dissolved into a soft mist. He went for his walking stick, but it wasn't there. Instead he found Uncle Hephaestus, leaning against the sign, smirking.

“So, you did it again?” Hephaestus’ shiny, bald head shimmered with a soft covering of mist in-line with the halo on the Warning sign. Logan couldn't help but laugh.

“You think it’s funny?” Logan pointed to the sign.

“C’mon Uncle Hepphy…” Even addressing his uncle affectionately didn't alter Hephaestus’ grin.

Hephaestus’ expression turned more serious. He held out Logan’s walking stick with his short, muscular arms. Oak chips showered Logan’s hand as he grabbed it with his right hand, placing his left hand quickly behind his back. Logan tried to avert Hephaestus’ round, steady eyes, but Hephaestus held steadfast onto the stick. “I notched it. This is our 26th hike.”

“Twenty-four, I don’t count the ones I actually didn't walk my own way.” He matched his uncle’s grin, angry now that the one person in all of Illium he thought would understand, suddenly didn't. Now he was sure he wouldn't show him the stone.

“Well, nevertheless, whether I held you or not, two hikes for every year.”

Logan barely recalled those earliest hikes, when Hephaestus would wrap him up like a package and tie him to his back. They didn't hike very far, but Logan remembered the way the mountain smelled sweet in the spring and bitter in the fall. As he grew older, the hikes became longer and longer, until Logan had reached the warning sign. Then came the day Logan had finally stepped into the halo; he had just turned ten. Uncle Hephaestus had fallen asleep after over- indulging in sweeties. Logan had been just inside the halo a few feet, and for only a few minutes, and yet he totally recalled how his body trembled with excitement from head to toe, how he felt like he belonged there. He had heard Uncle’s hysterical cries, and really had wanted to get out and assure Hephaestus that he was fine, but the feeling in the air, and the opaqueness of whatever the halo was made up of fascinated him. He wanted to dissect it, taste it, study it. Logan still felt that way. For some crazy reason, Logan had a knowing about this mountain; a knowing that the halo held secrets about the Before. Before Illium. Before this beautiful mountain ever existed. But the Before was forbidden in Illium. Perhaps that is why the Halo existed. Could the Board have created it? Logan would use science as a way to get some answers. Science was acceptable in Illium, and so Logan chuckled, “I’ll beat them at their own game!”

Hephaestus licked his lips, the softness returning to his eyes. “Those sweeties are irresistible kid. Gotta hand it to ya. Works every time.” He circled Logan, slowly checking every feature of his nephew. “So, what’s behind your back?”

Before Logan could swing his hand away, Hephaestus caught his cuff.

“Now, how am I going to explain that to your mother?” He grabbed Logan’s hand closer, gently touching the bloodied yellow wrap.

“Tell her that you’re teaching me how to carve walking sticks.”

“Now you know I can’t say that.” Hephaestus slowly opened the yellow cloth and heaved through his teeth. “She’d kill me if she thought I was teaching you contraband.”

“But you can carve walking sticks.” Logan grabbed his hand back and re-wrapped it.

“I’m not a scientist. My job is to make walking sticks so people will use their vouchers to buy ‘em. Your job is Science.” Hephaestus drew an imaginary circle with his hands. “The wheels of progress go round and round. We do what we do for Illium.” Suddenly, his eyes grew serious. “You’ll get the two of us rafted, and that would break Naira’s heart.” A chill shook Logan to the bone because he knew Uncle was right. Getting ‘rafted’ meant removal from family and friends, tied to a raft and set out to sea, alone. Who could survive? Nobody ever came back; in fact much like the haloed-summit, no one had ever seen the sea. If the halo doesn't kill you, the Board will. Logan threw back his shoulders, suddenly justified in his secret trips through the halo. He’d be careful. His mother would never find out. But he wouldn't stop. Not until he stood atop the summit.

“Beside, Naira would never forgive me.” Hephaestus’ doughy wrinkles drooped so heavily over his eyes, his bulbous nose, and pouting lips jutted. “She’d never forgive me.”

Logan shook the thought out of his head. The thought that occurred to him every time Hephaestus said his mother’s name like that. He knew they weren't related, but he also knew his mother had broken her pairing, and that under the rules…

1st 5 Pages March Workshop - Baird Rev 1



Name: Jeri Baird
Genre: Middle Grade Fantasy
Title: Fly True



PROLOGUE
MOIRA

I am called by many names. Destiny, Fate, Fortune; however I prefer Moira, for it sounds as if I have a heart.

I do not.

This is my story, although it may appear otherwise.

I am drawn to the twins whose parents conspire to deceive and cheat me. Unseen, I watch their births. The girl child arrives first. When the midwife whispers, “There is another,” joy transforms into terror, and a few minutes later the boy child arrives.

I watch as the mother turns from the babies, wraps her arms to her chest, and weeps. For never in the history of their village had more than one twin survived the quest that all twelve year olds must complete. One always sacrifices for the other.

Swaddled together the boy and girl gaze first into the other’s eyes. The familiar heartbeats soothe each from the other. Unaware of their parents’ sorrow or the knowledge that it will be but two years before they are torn apart, the twins know only the comfort of the moment. The boy will go with his father, the girl with her mother. They will be old enough to feel the pain of separation, yet young enough to forget.

I allow their foolishness for it delights me that they think to dupe me. But I know their destiny, and I alone will see that it comes to pass, for all things happen exactly as I intend.

I am Moira, and I will not be cheated.




CHAPTER ONE
THE TWELFTH BIRTHDAY
ADANNA

Adanna woke to the yeasty smell of baking bread. For most, that scent would comfort, but for one who woke to that odor every day of her life, it symbolized everything Adanna wanted to flee. She hated her mother for working long hours and then falling into bed exhausted. She hated how the smell permeated her clothes and her hair, such that when walking in the street strangers would identify her as the baker’s daughter. And she hated that she had eleven months and four days before she could leave the bakery, never to return.

Adanna’s basket of embroidery thread lay on the woven coverlet from her bed. The yellow thread sprawled over the covers because like most nights, she’d fallen asleep stitching. She settled the basket on her nightstand and threw the covers to the side.

When she yanked off her nightcap the golden hair she’d inherited from her mother tumbled to her shoulders. Her dark eyes surely came from a father she knew nothing of, and of whom her mother would tell her nothing.

A familiar sense of loss flooded through her, and she sighed. Would her mother remember it was her birthday?

“Adanna?”

She jumped, surprised to see her mother standing at the door. Flour smudged her face, and her hair glistened from the hot ovens. Dark circles underlined her eyes reminding Adanna of the late nights she’d worked.

“I baked something for you.” She held out a bun with sugared icing. Cinnamon, a precious commodity in the bakery dusted the top.

It tickled Adanna’s nose and her mouth watered. She smiled. “Thank you, Mother.”

Her mother smoothed her apron. “Almost to your time of magic. Are you excited?”

Adanna shrugged, not wishing to reveal her true feelings.

The mother sighed. “Then you will choose, and everything will be perfect again.”

Adanna frowned. When had her life ever been perfect?

Her mother continued, “There’s much you can’t understand until you’ve completed the quest. When you return…” she paused, and Adanna noticed her slight shudder. “…and Fate has chosen the bakery as your apprenticeship, everything will be as it should.”

Adanna crossed her arms. “Mother! Are you worried I won’t return from the quest?” When her mother paled, she knew it to be true. “How could you think I would fail? Really, Mother! Do you think so little of me?”

“No, no, of course, I don’t doubt your return.” She twisted her hands. “You just need to be careful in this year to gain tokens. You mustn’t tempt Fate.”

“Fate? What does Fate care about me?” Adanna’s gut tightened. What would she do if Fate did choose the bakery for her apprenticeship?

Her mother picked at the dough under her nails, and Adanna suspected that she hid something. But then, she had her own secrets, and apprenticing anywhere except in the bakery was one of them. She took a deep breath to calm her thudding heart and nibbled at the bun. “It’s wonderful, Mother. Thank you.”

Her mother smiled and caressed Adanna’s hair. “I’ve invited Marigold to feast with us tonight. I’ve started a rabbit stew. We’ll have cake, as well.”

“Yes, Mother. Thank you.”

She turned to leave and then looked back. “Less than a year now, Adanna. I promise everything will be better.”

“Yes, Mother. It will be better.”

Adanna had her own plan that she shared with no one. Not her best friend Marigold, not her favored teacher, and not her mother, who would be shocked to know her daughter capable of such thoughts. With a small favor from the fortune teller and some magic, Adanna felt confident she could pull it off.

She would not be a baker, whatever Fate might say.


CHAPTER THREE
ZANDER

Zander woke on his birthday, restless as he often woke. He had dreamed of bread. Not eating it, as he always had plenty of bread to eat, although its source remained a mystery. Sometimes he woke to loaves on their table, as if they sprouted there in the night. That morning, a small round bun with white icing sprinkled with a golden brown powder appeared as if by magic. Zander had quit asking his father about the bread when he realized he was given a new lie each time he asked.

No, it was the yeasty aroma of bread that Zander dreamed. The dream came so often and so strong that when he was five, his father woke to find him missing. After searching the streets he’d found Zander standing in front of a bakery with tears streaming down his face. His father had carried him home, tucked in strong arms holding Zander’s head to his chest. It was the only tenderness Zander remembered from his father.

Uneasy and eager to hunt - anxious to retreat into the forest, away from his father’s unpredictable moods, Zander dressed in dark pants and a green tunic. He only knew it his birthday because the night before, in a rare mood of cheerfulness, his drunken father had given him a present of a new bow and a dozen arrows. Astonished, Zander had wanted to go then to hunt, but his father insisted he join him for the evening meal. They ate deer that Zander had poached from a Lord’s lands in the forest.

They ate meat most nights whether the church allowed it or not. After all, Zander hunted the forest illegally. They may as well eat illegally. On nights not allowed they ate it cold, so the smell of cooking wouldn't alert anyone passing who might inform the priest. They didn't attend church, and they sure didn't want to be hauled in for confession.
Not allowed to attend school or church, Zander’s father taught him what he thought important. He had learned his numbers with ease, and had been responsible for the task of bookkeeping. Because of this, Zander knew they were not poor.

1st 5 Pages March Workshop - Keitel Rev 1


Name: Kindra Keitel
Genre: Young Adult Paranormal
Title: Voice Lessons

It was there again, the metallic sting that bit her throat every time music crossed her mind. She knew better than to try to actually sing, that only made it worse, made her cough and gag with what tasted like a mouth full of pennies. So, she cleared her throat, swallowed hard, and wound the ballerina’s key one more time, watching her twirl amidst the colored glass stones and fake gold rings. The cinnamon lullabies of her childhood still hung heavy in the air and Delphine knew she’d never have another chance to memorize them.

Her mom used to sing a lot, less and less toward the end and then not at all. She disconnected the doorbell two years ago, gave away the radio and the TV. They hadn’t been to a movie in months. She forbade concerts and plays, downloads and speakers, dancing and all of Christmas. She made it her life’s work to limit Delphine’s pain.

What her mom didn’t know was how much Delphine ached to hear the few stray notes that would inevitably fall from her mother’s mouth when her mind was distracted. She didn’t know how Delphine would sit on the floor outside the bathroom when she was in the shower, how she was waiting for her to forget and let the downy strains drift under the door. Even though the two of them agreed removing music from their lives would be for the better, nothing could quell the pulse of song hidden just under Delphine’s skin. And no matter how much music hurt, there was nothing she wanted more.

She locked the front door and stored away the click it made, chipped off a piece of peeling white paint from the doorknob and put it in her pocket. The house she and her mother had shared was small, so small it begged pardon for being there at all. Grayed siding held thin walls together and the windows held their breath; the cracked sidewalk below beckoned their glass with a wrinkle and a wink.

She watched it all disappear through the back window of the car, fully realizing she wasn’t Delphine Martin anymore. She never was, not really. All this time, she’d been Delphine Lockhart without knowing it. Her mom knew, though. It was all her idea, passing down her maiden name and hiding estranged relatives in plain sight.

She was still replaying the ballerina’s hymn in her mind when it was interrupted by the static twang of a country guitar.

“Mom.” Sophie snapped off the radio and shook her head at her mother, a severe frown emphasizing the reprimand.

“Oh, God, I forgot.” Cate bit her lip and glanced in the rearview mirror, catching Delphine’s eye. “I’m sorry, honey.”

Sophie had become a kind of buffer between Delphine and the world. She softened the effect it had on her, shielded her from the constant cacophony of life. And when merely camouflaging music was no longer enough, when Delphine begged for Sophie’s earbuds long enough to hear just one song, she was there to hold both hands in a tight sister grip while Delphine cried. Sophie understood the chaos music was to her, how Delphine feared it, how it burned her on the inside and how she yearned for it just the same.

“This can’t be it,” Sophie said when they paused outside a gated lawn. “We’re not even out of town yet. I thought it was somewhere in the country.”

“This is where the GPS sent us.” Cate flicked the little screen on the dashboard.

So, Delphine was suddenly one of them, part of the family that lived in that big brick house in the same little Missouri town she grew up in. The house with the tall iron gates and foot soldier pines lining the yard. The house everybody talked about but nobody ever visited.

“I can’t believe she did this to me,” Delphine said from the backseat. “First, she dies and then she sends me to live with monsters.” She snorted. “At least I’ll fit in with the freak show.”

Sophie pulled down her visor and looked at her friend in the mirror. “You’re not a freak.” She smoothed down her hair and went to work on the small red bulge near her chin, her mouth twisted to the side.

Cate reached back and patted Delphine’s knee.

Delphine tied a knot in the tissue she’d had in her hand for hours.

Every time she asked to meet her dead father’s family, her mother refused, something about the whole family disowning the two of them when Delphine’s father died. Her mom couldn’t say anything about meeting them now, though; she was dead too. And that gap, the one that always stood between them, now it was an impossible abyss.

Delphine promised herself that even though she was bound to these strangers by blood, she wouldn’t let them change her, wouldn’t let them make her forget. She’d make sure they knew everything they had forsaken almost sixteen years ago.

Cate parked the car and craned her neck trying to see the top of the house. “Sophie honey, you want to double check the address?”

Sophie fished in her purse for the scrap of paper. She tossed a tin of mints, a tube of mascara and a Sharpie under the windshield before she found it.

Cate compared the crumpled note to the brass numbers beside the front door. “Hm.”

“It’s right,” Delphine said without looking. She’d known about this house all her life, though living in it was the last thing she ever expected to do.

Sophie turned around and faced her friend. “So, you think the stories are true then?”

Delphine swallowed. “Guess I’m going to find out.”

“Of course they’re not true.” Cate flipped Sophie’s visor back into place with a snap. “It’s just a big house.”

“A big house with a witch inside.”

“Enough, Sophie.” Cate reached for Delphine’s hand. “That’s just it: they’re stories, there’s nothing to them.” She smiled. “You get to live in the biggest house in the county and you got yourself a brand-new family.”

A tear pooled between the rim of Delphine’s sunglasses and her cheek.

Cate squeezed her hand. “I know, honey.” She squeezed again because motherly gestures were what made Cate Cate.

“There she is.” Sophie leaned toward the glass. “She’s old but hey, at least her skin’s not green or anything.”

Elizabeth Lockhart, her skin a respectable wrinkly pink, shaded her eyes with one hand and waved at the car with the other.

“I don’t believe it,” said Delphine. “I saw her at the funeral.”

“She was there?” said Cate.

“Yeah. She stood in the back and cried. She never got anywhere near me.”

“See,” Sophie said, “now don’t you think that’s weird? Just a little bit?”

The three of them looked at each other and opened their doors in unison. They unloaded Delphine’s bags and piled them on the paved driveway.

"You’re finally here.” Elizabeth floated down the blue and gray steps, reaching out her arms. Delphine ignored her grandmother, choosing instead to adjust the buckle on one of her bags. Elizabeth lowered her eyes and turned to Sophie. “How are you, dear? You’re Sophie, aren’t you?” She barely gave her time to nod. “I’ve heard about you. And this is your mom?”

“Cate.” Her hand shot out from under her coat. “You can call me Cate.”

“Why didn’t you tell me who you were?” Delphine crossed her arms to stave off any unwanted displays of affection.

“What, dear?”

“Two days ago, at the funeral. That was you, wasn’t it?” She could be brave behind sunglasses.

“Yes.”

“So? Why didn’t you tell me?”

“I’m sorry.” She touched Delphine’s elbow. “I thought you had enough to deal with that day.”

“So what exactly are you, anyway?” No one ever accused Sophie of having any tact.

“What am I?”

Cate pinched her daughter’s shoulder and smiled an apologetic smile.

Sophie wrenched free and frowned. “Well, are you a witch or some kind of freak or what?”

1st 5 Pages March Workshop - Kroepfl Rev 1

Name: Jim Kroepfl
Genre: Middle Grade Historical Fantasy
Title: Kannihut and the Dying Land

Kannihut focused on the low sky. He was sure this time. The strange light glowed in the distance, reaching up into the sky in long orange streaks, silhouetting the trees. But it was dusk and the light was in the north, like a brother to the sun, threatening to bring a completely different day. The glow came from the hills beyond the lake village, out near the mysterious island where the Spirit Father lived, but this side of the great swamp . . . where nobody lived.

Kannihut wanted to put it out of his mind, but lately he’d seen the glow more and more, and each time the wrongness of it gnawed at him deeper. He was wondering if he dared to bring it up again when his older brother’s command broke through his thoughts.

“Kannihut, pay attention,” Willisaw hissed. “If we miss a deer, Gishgoo will tie us to a tree and leave us for the Hill People.” Before, Willisaw was known for his humor; now, Kannihut wasn’t even sure if he was joking about Gishgoo. Kannihut wasn’t sure about much anymore; he never seemed to do right in his brother’s eyes.

Kannihut shifted his legs and tried to focus on spotting deer. He and Willisaw had been crouching at the edge of the dry lakebed for hours. The thin layer of mud on their skins was beginning to crack and break away, making him itch all over. The small pond had attracted deer throughout the spring, but it was almost gone now and not many deer came anymore.

“Let me take the first shot today, Willisaw,” Kannihut whispered.

Willisaw shook his head as he watched the clearing. “No. We can’t miss.”

Kannihut started to protest, but Willisaw was right; if they let a deer get away, Gishgoo might kick them out of Beaver Clan. They’d be alone again and might as well walk down to the river and wait for the Hill People to come and cut their throats. He shook his head to refocus his thoughts.

Willisaw sighed. “It’s too hot. All the deer are deep in the forest.”
Kannihut took one more look at the northern sky. Thankfully, the strange glow was gone. He could just make out a patch of flowers at the opposite edge of the lakebed, tiny red and purple dots in front of a stand of young spruce. As he stared at the flowers’ vibrant colors, he felt a strange quivering inside. An area in the trees looked different from the rest, greener and brighter, as if lit by sunshine, and as he stared, the leaves stood out even more and began to shimmer.

Willisaw turned to look behind them as Gishgoo, Kaak and the dog came out of the forest. Kaak was the clan’s best hunter and had spent more time in the woods than anyone. The dog, which Kaak refused to name, stood next to him as it always did, its light brown fur and white face blending into the underbrush, its paws covered with mud to block its scent from dabbing the ground.

“Let’s go,” Gishgoo said. “We’ll hunt near the stream tomorrow.”

Willisaw stood, but Kannihut remained crouching, staring at the trembling colors.

“Come on, Kannihut,” Willisaw said with hushed impatience.

Kannihut couldn’t take his eyes away from the vivid shimmering in the trees. “Wait,” he said in a whisper, wondering if he should ask the others if they saw it, too. Then he thought better of it. These men were hunters; they noticed the smallest movement in the brush. The area was too bright, too prominent to be missed—if it was real.

“We’re leaving,” Gishgoo commanded while a smitch of dried mud fell from the downturned corners of his mouth. As he turned his well-muscled back, the dog’s ears shot up and it focused on the same area in the trees that held Kannihut’s gaze.

Kaak followed the dog’s eyes. “Look,” he whispered.

A young buck moved out of the trees and took tentative steps into the meadow. Slow as glaciers the hunters put arrows to the gut and raised their bows. The deer was out of range but coming toward them. It had four points and a unique diamond-shaped patch of white at the base of its neck.

Willisaw moved back into a crouch and held up a finger, signaling that he would shoot first. Without moving his head, he glanced at Kannihut and winked, looking for just a moment like the old Willisaw, before they lost everything. The deer stopped in the middle of the lakebed and looked in all directions, smelling the breeze for danger, its white tail twitching. It took a few more tentative steps toward the hunters as they pulled hard against their bows.

Kannihut held his breath as he strained to hold his bow in place, but his arm started trembling. He glanced at Willisaw’s arm, steady as rock. Kannihut thought about the blue ink marking of a Water Panther on Willisaw’s bicep, the one he kept covered with mud, even when he wasn’t hunting.

“There is no more Panther Clan,” Willisaw repeatedly told Kannihut. It was probably true. After people stopped hunting near the river, they hadn’t seen other Water Panther families and nobody back at the lakes claimed to be from the lost clan. It was just a story now, like the spirits in the springs.

When Willisaw let out a reproachful breath and Kannihut knew the warning was meant for him. He pulled his thoughts back to the deer and willed himself to steady his shaking arm.

Hurry, he thought as the burning in his muscles grew. The hunters waited until the buck had its head down and its side toward them.

Thrum!

Willisaw’s tortured bow let out a muffled sigh of relief as it snapped back into shape, slinging the arrow across the lakebed. At the sound, the others released their bows and three more arrows shot toward the deer. Two struck it in the neck and one in the back haunch. Kannihut’s arrow sailed just over its back, which he knew everyone noticed. The buck dashed into the forest, limping, and the hunters burst out of the brush and ran after it.

Willisaw, running at full speed, pointed as the deer ran down a dry creek bed. The hunters instinctively shifted in that direction, the dog alongside them. Kannihut tried to keep up but was soon far behind, even though he followed at a dead run. He stopped at the bottom of a hill to catch his breath and that was when he saw the deer.

It had four-pointed antlers and a diamond marking on its chest. As it came over the hill, it wasn’t limping and no blood stained its hide. The buck noticed Willisaw and calmly stared at him with its dark liquid eyes. Time stood still while Kannihut admired the fearless animal—until he remembered his purpose. He slowly raised his bow, breaking the delicate bond between them. At the movement, the buck turned and sprang back over the hill. Kannihut ran after it, his bow ready, but when he reached the crest the deer was gone. There was only a wide empty meadow and no place for the buck to disappear.